Super Beast Scroll: Lion

Name: Super Beast Scroll: Lion

Description & Effect: Kiyuki draws a quick scribble of a lion down on any surface, using his own blood, and channels magic into the 'ink'. It will chase down the enemy by locking onto the magic signature they give off. It explodes into real ink when it hits the enemy somehow. The lion looks like a shisaa with inplied texture that would be on the surface it was drawn.

AP/MP Cost: 20 MP

Class: Offensive

Element: Earth/Water (Earth for ink, Water for the blood he uses)

Range: Long Range

Effect: Deals lower moderate (tier 1.5) damage to the enemy and splatters them with a good amount of ink.


Duration: Beast Lasts 2 posts, or until enemy is either hit or it rams into a surface (in which case it must end earlier than 5 posts).

This should be a summons.

Actually, because it explodes into ink on impact with the enemy or a surface, it is a spell. Pictomancers fight like that, by drawing a picture and making it come to life to attack the enemy. Like a Necromancer brings the dead to life as Zombies, and a Seromancer brings wood to life as an all around weapon.

But you're using it as a Summons. And NO spell lasts indefinitely until enemy is either hit or it rams into a surface. That's how a summons is used.



So either revise this as a spell in itself, or its a summons/pet/mount due the fact that it is a beast and is being used as such.

There.

Shorten the amount of time it last. You not paying nearly enough for it to last 5 post. Also you need to tell us how much damage the thing does and how good it is at chasing a person down. Also change the description, it seems too much like a real summon. Just make it explode on contact with a person not trying to claw or bite or anything, spells in the shape of creatures is ok. But they can't be sentient beings.

Fixed, clarified, doom.

Lower it to 2 post of chasing as you only paying 20 MP for this. and you still haven't put down the amount of damage it does.

There.

Approved