Nafia The Abyssal Valkyrie

Name: Nafia

AP/MPCost: 70 MP

Element: Light

Attacks:
Freeze Shot- Shoots an extremely weak (Tier 1) energy from her finger. It travels quickly, and if it hits, it will freeze the enemy (or small object) with holy Crystal until their next post. This can be shattered by a physical attack, however the target hit will take Tier 2 damage they would have if released from that state with an attack.

Instant Transmission- When enemy/object is frozen by Freeze Shot (only Freeze Shot), she can shoot another freeze shot, to instantly switch places with the frozen target, this can get her out of attacks, help her reach high places, and set up her Overdrive. Does not prolong the freeze duration, nor does it shorten it

Nibelung Valesti (Stage One): When enemy is in the air, she will fire a Freeze Shot at the enemy and freeze them in midair, it sits there a moment as Nafia runs and positions herself directly under it, and shoots another Freeze shot at the holy crystal directly above her. This will instantly make her switch places with the frozen enemy, from where she will drop, and smash the crystal with her sword.

Description: The fayth of Nafia was hidden away from summoners, as she was a minor aeon at best. Nafia as a fayth looks like a frightened little girl, which is a younger version of the summon, wearing a black dress, like a widow's outfit without the veil.

Nafia as an aeon takes the form of an average looking teenage girl, metal plating protects her breasts, with shoulder-guards. These plates are a part of her light pink top that goes to slightly below her hips. She wears small, but tight shorts, that allow her to not reveal her undergarments, however are not shown past the top. She wears a pair of black leg warmers that look like pant legs, with white frills. She also wears a pair of short feminine grieves and she carries around a short sword.

A black hair-band (whatever that thing in her hair is) holds her long blonde hair away from her eyes for the most part. Her eyes are demonic yellow, which seems to be the only difference from the fayth other than age and outfit.

History: Kiyuki found this Aeon while looking for treasure (funny how he's always doing that). The fayth appeared to him for no real reason, as if she had been lonely and scared for thousands of years. Kiyuki didn't know this was a fayth really as she appeared from nowhere, and looked lost. As he tried to ask her what she was doing in a place like this, the Fayth suddenly gave him a big hug and sobbed. Kiyuki was confused, but it was a little girl, so he couldn't exactly deny her a hug. He completed the hug as she faded away into pyreflies and began to swirl around him wildly.

As the pyreflies faded away, he heard the young girls voice the first and only time, as it said, "Please Protect Me, For I've Lost Myself." Kiyuki was oddly confused at this, however he suddenly figured out he was in the chamber of the Fayth, and noticed that this little girl was an Aeon. He kept it a nice secret.



Nibelung Valesti

First, you're not fractioning down Tier levels on a Summons. I can understand doing so with weapons, and possible spells depending on their nature, but it's not going to fly with Summons.

A Tier 1 IS A Tier 1, not 1/10 of one

That wouldn't even cause frostbite let alone you stating it's going to completely freeze something.

Please fix this accordingly and bump when you're ready for me to look at it again

Fixed it. However the point of the attack was it encases the enemy in holy crystal until their second following post, not the damage. In other words, it is a light elemental attack, not ice.

You're stating "freeze" in your descriptions, so anyone is going to think Ice. -.- And in just the first attack, you want someone to be completely frozen in place, AND take double damage at only 50MP should they break out of this crystal?


The second I have no problem with.

The third one, Freeze shot is used twice AND your using Earth at the end with no MP to compensate with that. And when you say the target is in the air, is that just specifically for flying targets, or did this summons send the target into the air at some point that I'm not reading?

1: No just if someone breaks them out early with a swing of their sword, the frozen target will take 200% of the damage from the sword swing. This isn't a permanent effect.

2: Cool

3: Rock refers to the crystal the enemy is encased in, still holy. Also, if the enemy is at some point, in midair, Nibelung Valesti is still usable on them, also, when freeze shot hits the same target twice, the second time while they are encased in crystal, it is instant transport.

200% damage!? Absolutely not! O.o

Rock is Earth. Fix the description on this stuff please if you want it to work the way you're telling me is.

Lowered, Fixed.

*twitch*

*puts arm around your shoulder and pulls you close* You want noogies? o.O

My dear water boy..... *sighs* NO one is going to take THAT amount of damage from a break free attack at 50MP, period. The MP alone just covers all the Freeze shots your using in all three attacks.

I'm *trying* to be fair with you. Either make that damage reasonable, or think of something else.

That was the point of adding it there you see. Anyhow, I bumped up the MP cost.

Now..... that we've talked via CB

I will allow the now stated damage listed in the first attack, simply because the target will have the choice to either stay confined or take the damage if they want to be free of it. You are giving the target a choice.

This a one time deal due the circumstances listed in the attack. Don't try for Tier 2 anything again until you reach the post limit you are allowed to use them.

Approved